I Need Hard Critiques!!! My exhibit pieces

[theantiquetiger]

I have started editing on my images that I want to place in the Photo Exhibit. I will be adding images to this thread as I complete them. I am taking my time, not rushing the PP.

Here is the first one. It is one of the oldest operating grocery stores in Baton Rouge (mostly a convenient store/antique store now). What I mostly did here was burn many of the boxes in the candy case at different exposures and a few things here and there. I cleaned up a few spots and cloned out a florescent light fixture.

I am wondering if the WHITE ice cream freeze in the center is robbing too much attention away from the candy case?

As always, click on my Flickr to get the full version.

capitol Grocery by Theantiquetiger, on Flickr

[Runmonty]

AT - I went to look at Flickr version as I find these easier to identify any artifacts and the image is set to private

[theantiquetiger]

AT - I went to look at Flickr version as I find these easier to identify any artifacts and the image is set to private

OK, you should be able to see it now

[Marko]

I can give a critique on this tomorrow - but i do have 1 piece of advice....
Try to make your selections work with each other on some level...OR have sets of images that work together.

[theantiquetiger]

I can give a critique on this tomorrow - but i do have 1 piece of advice....
Try to make your selections work with each other on some level...OR have sets of images that work together.

Are you suggesting a theme of some kind? I am going to try and stick to similar subjects. I cannot use LSU (my favorite subject) because of licensing rights, so I am going to stick to two themes, Baton Rouge and New Orleans landmarks. A little cliche-ish, but that's about my only decent subjects I capture well. I am heading to New Orleans in a few hours for a walk about, so I hope to grab some great shots (I had this trip planned before I got the offer of the exhibit).

[theantiquetiger]

Here is the original version I did last year. I am kind of digging the sepia tone, it tones down the harsh white of the freezer. (of course I will re-work it and not just use this copy)


capt grocery1 by Theantiquetiger, on Flickr

[Anuj]

yup sepia seems easier on eyes than B&W

[Marko]

For critique, I find the whole exposure off on the left side of the image. It's too dark for me and it will be difficult to balance with the rest of the image.
I hate to say this but if this were mine I'd likely reshoot it or choose another image.
I'm not suggesting a theme so much as using images that work together on some level. You remember Sesame Street? "One of these things just doesn't belong". Start with two images, then add a third, fourth fifth etc. As you add them one at a time make sure they all 'belong'. Hope that makes sense, hope it helps and know in advance that it's not simple.

[theantiquetiger]

For critique, I find the whole exposure off on the left side of the image. It's too dark for me and it will be difficult to balance with the rest of the image.
I hate to say this but if this were mine I'd likely reshoot it or choose another image.
I'm not suggesting a theme so much as using images that work together on some level. You remember Sesame Street? "One of these things just doesn't belong". Start with two images, then add a third, fourth fifth etc. As you add them one at a time make sure they all 'belong'. Hope that makes sense, hope it helps and know in advance that it's not simple.

OK, after feedback here and similar feedback on other sites, this one is scrapped.

[theantiquetiger]

Here is my second pick for the exhibit.

This image has grown on me so much in just one day, it is my favorite image I have ever taken.

Other than the faux bottom, there was very little PP done.

Some critiques I got from other forums were:

- the sharpening halos are to hard (I don't see anything)

- her left breast needs darkening (I disagree, at full size, she is not complete silhouette, you can make out details of her)

You HARD critique wanted


jogger3 by Theantiquetiger, on Flickr