Old warehouse

[celksy]

I wasn't happy with my last "ugly" entry for the assignment forum, so I was going to submit this.... not sure if this fits either, though.

Anyway, would love some critiques- thanks in advance.

[susan]

I really like this a lot. In post, Bringing out those oranges just a bit would be a nice adjustment (IMO) I can also see placing a model there in a pretty, flowy, lacy dress with sassy orange high heels. I think it is just fine for the "ugly" thread too. :-)

[theantiquetiger]

Technically, I see nothing wrong with the image, nicely focused, leveled, great light coming through the windows, etc, so the only thing to critique the subject. One thing I remember from photography in college 20 years ago is what are you try to show in the image? I think you should have shown more of the building. The building seems to have great character and I feel you missed showing it. If you are just trying to show the light coming through the dirty windows, maybe crop in closer to just the pair of windows.

[susan]

Technically, I see nothing wrong with the image, nicely focused, leveled, great light coming through the windows, etc, so the only thing to critique the subject. One thing I remember from photography in college 20 years ago is what are you try to show in the image? I think you should have shown more of the building. The building seems to have great character and I feel you missed showing it. If you are just trying to show the light coming through the dirty windows, maybe crop in closer to just the pair of windows.

Agreeing and disagreeing. I totally agree with the positive part of the crit. Disagree with the suggestion to crop. Odd numbers in art work great. Lack of symmetry does too ... Celksy shows both. Plus he has the mystery of those windows, leaving the viewer asking questions and wanting to look longer into the photo...... the orange brick makes the image pop ----Immediately, I fell in love with it because for me, I could see beyond the image and personalize it.

[theantiquetiger]

To me (and this is just my opinion), there is too much stuff happening in the image and my eye does not easily land on one subject. I love everything in this image (especially the orange bricks and broken bricks at the top), but I feel all this stuff is part of the building and not enough building is shown. I find the center "column" of bricks a little distracting and I would have maybe not put it center of the image. It's hard to critique non technical items because we are just now critiquing art not skills.

Like I said, I really like the image but feel it is missing the character of the building by not showing more OR it is missing the character of the windows because of everything else going on in the image.

Celksy, I am by no means an art critic (or a photographer LOL), so please take my critique with a grain of salt.

[susan]

To me (and this is just my opinion), there is too much stuff happening in the image and my eye does not easily land on one subject. I love everything in this image (especially the orange bricks and broken bricks at the top), but I feel all this stuff is part of the building and not enough building is shown. I find the center "column" of bricks a little distracting and I would have maybe not put it center of the image. It's hard to critique non technical items because we are just now critiquing art not skills.

Like I said, I really like the image but feel it is missing the character of the building by not showing more OR it is missing the character of the windows because of everything else going on in the image.

Celksy, I am by no means an art critic (or a photographer LOL), so please take my critique with a grain of salt.

Returning to the image, I agree with the center "column" issue .... I think tho, in my mind - I saw it as an asset as a wonderful place to plop a model. That said, there is no model in the photo --- hmmm. Perhaps if the "column" weren't near center it would strengthen the image more.

[celksy]

Thank you both so much for your time! All the grains (or mounds) of salt are good; they will help me learn!

And, I appreciate the back & forth dialogue... antiquetiger, I get what you are saying and I wondered about it myself. My eye wanders around on this photo and I wondered if there was too much going on. When I first took the shots, I was more interested in the hard surfaces (bricks, peeling paint) without the windows; then I shot this one. I never really fully noticed the center column- the eye tends to the top and sides.

susan, I think what you are saying is that sometimes the wandering is good I'm really glad you like it (both of you; it's appreciated)

[susan]

Thank you both so much for your time! All the grains (or mounds) of salt are good; they will help me learn!

And, I appreciate the back & forth dialogue... antiquetiger, I get what you are saying and I wondered about it myself. My eye wanders around on this photo and I wondered if there was too much going on. When I first took the shots, I was more interested in the hard surfaces (bricks, peeling paint) without the windows; then I shot this one. I never really fully noticed the center column- the eye tends to the top and sides.

susan, I think what you are saying is that sometimes the wandering is good I'm really glad you like it (both of you; it's appreciated)

You are most welcome. As far as "art" goes - it is always subjective. :-) I really would like to see a model working that column :-D