Crit please

[thoughton]

Unfortunately I took this while on a business trip to Barcelona a couple months back, so a reshoot is ... awkward

[tbond]

As a novice, with untutored eye, I like both images becasue they pose questions.
I feel there is more story and questions in the first uncropped image. However I think the brightness of the flourescent light is too much of a distractor in both versions. You might try selectively darkening down the flourescent light by masking and see if this helps. Just a novice's thought.

[thoughton]

Thanks for the comments Tbond! Much appreciated. I'll have a look at darkening the light.