A try on landscape

[Yisehaq]

Hi All,
Humbly waiting your comments.

[Dwayne Oakes]

This photo is really nice ! good job.

good

-comp is nice
-exposure is right on (good detail in the clouds)
-nice natural colors
-good DOF
-horizon is level (in this case the black band in the FG)
-good detail and contrast

nit

-the comp is nice as is but there is to much sky in the photo and is
overpowering the mountains, try cropping an 1 1/2 inches off the top
of the photo this will balance the photo out nicely

-the color version works good here, but there is a lot of different
tones going on in this photo and black and white would excel here,
try the photo in black and white with the new cropped sky and this
photo will amaze you

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[Ben H]

I agree with the above - beautiful shot, but the clouds are overpowering the nicer elements - they are bright and large, and so the eye is drawn to those first.

To me, I love the texture, detail and colours in the foreground, with the mountains in the background - the sky just distracts. Try some cropping to rebalance and see whether than improves the shot...

Very nice though, indeed!

Edit: In fact, I've just done a quick edit on it here (crop, bit of a dodge/burn), and it works *much* better for me....
This has the benefit of putting the people in a nice framing position, letting the mountains and nature dwarf them, and giving three thirds in the image - foreground, mountains and sky.

If you don't mind, here's a small version of my quick edit to illustrate:



If I was doing this properly I'd probably spend a bit more time on the dodging/burning to bring out the foreground/mountain detail, and possibly the clouds too.

Really beautiful shot.

[Marko]

I agree with Ben H on this one.

THIS would have made a great HDR shot because there is more brightness than the shot can naturally handle. The sky is too bright (by about 15%) and the foreground is too dark.

Further dodging and burning will make this print sing. I like Ben H's edit, though the foreground and base of the mountains could be dodged even more.

Hope that helps,
Marko

[Yisehaq]

Thank you, Dwayne Oakes, Ben H and Marko for you constructive comments. I will try to work on your possible suggestions.

Dwayne Oakes, I never tried working on B/W. I will try to do that.

Ben H I like your edition. I will work on that. Could you tell me how you frame it?

Marko it's nice to hear from you again.

I am very glad that I get somethings right by applying what I have learned from you guy. I couldn't thank you enough.

[Yisehaq]

Here is a try on your comments

[Yisehaq]

The BW version.

[Ben H]

Here is a try on your comments

Very nice! And much much more effective than your original version.

Good job!

[Marko]

Post 6 (the coloured version) is very well done and much more effective than the original.

I might selectively dodge the foreground by another 5-25% as there are highlights that are just waiting to be born, waiting to sing .

Middle top edge, and 1 inch below that edge +5% burn.

My goal with these extremely detailed critiques is get the strongest image possible (IMO, of course - yours may be different)

Hope that helps
Marko

[Dwayne Oakes]

That is alot better !

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